this is the link to margaret's blog:
http://margaretnoble.net/blog/
and this is the link to the noise I listened to:
http://margaretnoble.net/blog/monte-gordo-beach-portugal/
Tiny gurgles awaken the sea. The trickling water cascades down, turning swiftly. It rushes down, plunging over and over. The seas churn, constantly bringing the fresh, salty, life sustaining water to the famished creatures below. In and out goes the current, many times over. There is a lull, then comes the water rushing back. Bubbles run to the surface, foam overlapping in the briny sea. The fresh smell fills the air, but only for a moment. Again and again comes the persistent motion of the tireless wave. Suddenly, we are plunged into the water. Tiny bubbles float to the surface, the only things able to escape the oceans salty grasp. A calming moment graces the landscape, but yet again the water plunges into the indentations among the rocks. The slippery mountains are pounded against, wearing away at the beautiful green hue that plagues the rocks. Tiny whispers and gurgles speak of danger. A great wave pounds the surface of the water to the caves, then returns to the seas once more. A sweet calm is welcomed back again. But the wrath of the sea is never forgotten.
Wow I loved your description it was- perfection! This was definitely uplifting, thank you sooo much for this!!
ReplyDeleteI loved how you used personification throughout the whole thing, constantly talking about the sea as a being. The way you started the post off with "Tiny gurgles awaken the sea" was great. You could already get a feel for your story.
ReplyDeleteI especially loved when you said "The trickling water cascades down, turning swiftly." Cascades added that much more to the story, it was a great use of vocabulary.
I think out of the whole post I especially liked how you said " The seas churn, constantly bringing the fresh, salty, life sustaining water to the famished creatures below." This was another example of personification, and it was very well done too. It really captured my attention and made me even more interested in reading the rest of your piece. You really know how to capture the reader. If I had to change anything I would suggest you be careful about your use of repetition. For instance in the first paragraph you say “cascades down” and in the next sentences you also use the word down. This could easily be changed so that your piece could be even more amazing than it already is.